Winning June 2017 FAN FICTION Screenplay – DOCTOR WHO “The Kingdom of the Mara” by Paul Hewitt

Genre: Fantasy, Adventure

The Doctor accidentally picks up Shona and the two investigate a red comet that lands on Earth. The Doctor discovers the Mara are back, and must use their technology against them to defeat them once more.

CAST LIST:

Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
The Doctor: Brian Carleton
Shona: Konstantina Mantelos
Solomon: Anthony Botelho
Vladislav: Jack Comerford
Mila: Andrea Meister
Enok: Jordy Kieto

Get to know the writer:

What is your TV spec screenplay about DOCTOR WHO about?

The Doctor and Shona (last seen in the episode “Last Christmas”), find themselves in Bohemia during the Dark Ages. A tyrant, Lord Ivan, hoards a peculiar red crystal with telepathic powers called the Crimson. Wearing jewels made of Crimson, Lord Ivan and his followers collectively conjure a serpentine gestalt being from the darkest recesses of their minds: The Mara.

Possessed by The Mara, Lord Ivan quickly conquers all before him. He besieges the largest castle (and only cathedral) in the rival kingdom of Vladislav. The Doctor knows that walls, warriors and weapons are no match for the insidious, seductive spell of The Mara.

The Doctor and Shona rouse King Vladislav and his people to fight The Mara through very unconventional means – particularly for The Doctor. The world’s future truly rests on a hope and a prayer.

Why does this screenplay fit into the context of the show?

It’s a traditional good versus evil story with the odd bits of comedy and horror that you’d expect from Dr. Who. I wrote it for the 12th Doctor, Peter Capaldi – who I think is fabulous – a throwback to the 70’s Doctors, Jon Pertwee and Tom Baker.

This story is very much in the mold of classic Doctor Who. You have a historic setting that is disrupted by the presence of a perfidious alien – oh, and then there’s The Mara and a mysterious red crystal. Seriously though, The Mara was one of my favourite Who monsters from the 80’s and I am surprised it has not reappeared on TV (yet). The companion Tegan’s experience with the “evil dream snake” is what made her my favourite during the Peter Davison years.

We all know The Doctor’s companion is a surrogate for the audience and a great companion makes for a great Who story. I chose a character from a recent Christmas special – Shona McCullough (played wonderfully by actor Faye Marsay)– because I immediately saw in her the potential for a long term TARDIS traveller.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Faith Wins

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

Doctor Who
(also Game of Thrones, Mad Men…)

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Six months (Off and On). So maybe 6 weeks’ worth of an actual research and writing (and rewriting).

How many stories have you written?

Two Features (Housesitting, Guttersnipe)
One Documentary (All About Me)
One Short (co-wrote) (Saved From The Grave)

Next up is my own TV series and this TV spec script was an excellent exercise in writing for this genre.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

In My Life (The Beatles)

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Time was my biggest obstacle… finding the time.

The second challenge was how to portray The Mara. It is obviously not my own creation, so I wanted to do justice to the original Mara stories with my version.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Acting, films, politics, history, rugby and beer (not necessarily in that order)

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I had my first feature screenplay analyzed not once, but twice. I was impressed by the depth and value of the criticism. So I did not hesitate to submit my Doctor Who script for analysis and I am pleasantly surprised in the end to have it recognized here. Thank you.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

It’s an old cliché but true: Write what you know. That’s why I picked Doctor Who for my first TV screenplay.

Be prepared to take a lot of criticism along the way. Your story (and your skills) will benefit from it.

Procrastination is thine worst enemy.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Winning FAN FICTION SPEC of EVERYBODY LOVES RAYMOND, by Marc Mulcahy

Winning Screenplay – EVERYBODY LOVES RAYMOND
Written by Marc Mulcahy

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
MARIE – Frances Townend
RAY – Peter Mark Raphael
DEBRA – Kayla Farris
JEFFREY – Jonah Akler-Silliman
ROBERT – Christopher Huron
AMY – Vanessa Quagliara
FRANK – Charles Gordon

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Family

It’s Marie vs Debra in a cat & mouse game for control of who’s cleaning the house.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay based on the TV SERIES “Everybody Loves Raymond” about?

It’s about seeing what we all figured would happen eventually; that Marie’s constant meddling and being a nuisance in general, would lead to Debra’s insanity.

How does this episode fit into the context of the series?

I actually thought this plot line was a no-brainer for Debra. I would have done this myself given the same situation.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Sweet revenge

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

Seinfeld

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Initially, it took a few days but I’ve tweaked it several times over the past several years.

How many stories have you written?

Three sit coms and one film.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

That’s a tough one. Sometimes I’ll be in a certain mood and one song fits it perfectly so I just keep playing it for hours. Once, during a late, dark night on a long and empty stretch of I99 in California, I listened to Chris Isack’s, Wicked Game for 6 hours.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Still not happy with a couple lines.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Animals, justice, cooking and dining out, creating fun and innovative entertainment, growth, experiencing unforgettable moments (CORRR-ny)

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I wanted to get some feedback on it and I thought people would enjoy it. Great feedback, thanks.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

In the words of Rodney Dangerfield as Thorton Melon, “Don’t go. It’s rough out there. Move back in with your parents. Let them worry about it.”

But if you insist, get your work out there, everywhere. Listen to criticism and learn what you can from it but don’t let it get to you. Remember, your writing is YOUR view on the subject so don’t compromise that. Go back to your earliest stuff and make it better. If you can’t do that, you either have the rare early masterpiece, or maybe you should consider another dream job. I’m sure every writer has heard to write what you know and what you care about. When you do, your writing becomes interesting, and for me, this is the the most important thing about a script. You can follow all the formulas you want but if it isn’t interesting then what’s the point. Conversely, if you have a very interesting story, you can break many, if not most formula rules–as long as you keep it interesting. Oh, and a very good agent wouldn’t hurt, either. The reality is you can be the best unknown writer since Shakespeare, but to be successful at this gig you will also need some luck and there’s a decent chance that some of your success will come from the old “who you know” variety. The fact that every year sharp, really well written shows get dropped while 2 Broke Girls remains on the air (I’m still convinced there’s serious network blackmail going on there) proves this point.

Lastly, A famous script doctor–who’s services I wasted $6,000 on–said that most writers better be prepared to stick it out for 10 years before they can make a living from writing. This Debby Downer also told the auditorium of almost 900 wanna-be writers that only a handful present would probably be successful and that many would lose friends and family because of their failures. In retrospect, I guess I should have waited until AFTER the 3 day seminar to quit my day job. The good news is that with webtv and all the new platforms, there are more opportunities than ever for writers. Just keep looking for these different avenues to showcase your work.


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FAN FICTION Screenplay – SPINACH RUN (Popeye), by Neil Chase

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Winning Screenplay – SPINACH RUN
Written by Neil Chase

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Ursina Luther
POPEYE – Philip Krusto
BLUTO – Casey Estey
WIMPY – Geoff Mays
JUAN CORTEX – John Lester Phillips
SEGAR – Sean Ballantyne

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Action, Crime, Thriller

Tasked with capturing a nefarious chemist, Navy SEALs Popeye, Bluto, Sweet-Pea and Wimpy find themselves at the mercy of an infamous drug lord.

Get to know the writer:

What is your Fan Fiction screenplay on the cartoon “POPEYE” about?

Spinach Run is a fresh take on the Popeye universe, where four Navy SEALs (Popeye, Bluto, Sweet-Pea, and Wimpy) are sent to a South American jungle to capture a wanted chemist and recover a sample of his experimental toxin, code-named Spinach. Their mission goes sideways and they’re captured by the chemist’s employer, a notorious drug lord, who decides to use them as guinea pigs for the toxin.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Popeye’s been around for almost 90 years, and through all that time, he’s been portrayed pretty much the same way. This is a completely different way of seeing the characters we all know and love, while staying true to who they are at heart.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Action, thriller.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Probably Star Wars.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

It took me about three days to write it. Once the initial idea came to me and I started writing, it came pretty fast.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve been writing since I was a kid, so it’s hard to say how many short stories there have been. That said, I’ve written a dozen feature screenplays, numerous short screenplays, and I’m awaiting publication of my debut novel.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I always wanted to try my hand at fan fiction, so I thought I’d take a crack at a character that’s not so mainstream, yet one that’s still recognizable.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

None that I can think of. It was a fun experience from start to finish.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

My other passion is acting, which actually helps me to be a better screenwriter, as I’ve learned where to focus in terms of dialogue, action lines, and so on. I try to write the kinds of scripts I would want to read as an actor.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

The Fan Fiction Festival is well known, and seemed like a perfect fit for this script. It was a great way to gauge if I was onto something with my take on a classic character. I’m so glad to have entered, not only for the win, but for the fantastic feedback. It’s good to see the script’s strengths and areas for improvement. This was a fun script to write, and I’m grateful for the useful advice to make it even better. Thank you for the great notes!

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FAN FICTION Screenplay – UNIVERSAL SAINT BATMAN by Nathan Trumbull

Watch the January 2017 FAN FICTION Screenplay Winner.

Best Scene from the screenplay UNIVERSAL SAINT BATMAN Screenplay
Written by Nathan Trumbull

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Catherine D’Angelo
SUMMER – Val Cole
BIRDIE – Shannon McNally
KYLE – Gabriel Darku
BRUCE WAYNE – David Straus
VIC STONE – Charles Gordon
JOKER – Nick Wicht

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Adventure, Action, Sci-Fi, Mystery

Decades after the disbanding of the Justice League, Gotham citizen, Birdie Vale’s public and private fight with a cutting-edge robotic policing initiative leads her on a collision course with not only her clouded past, but the Dark Knight himself.


What is your screenplay about?

Universal Saint Batman is about a future where Gotham has begun questioning Batman’s relevance after the dawn of hyper intelligent AI systems and androids. Birdie Vale, a new character to the Batman Universe, seeks to find out from the Bat himself what he thinks about the new robots as well as explore her own personal relationship to him.

What genres does your screenplay under?

In typical Batman fashion, I’d consider this a neo-noir sci-fi mystery.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Fun and fresh

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

I think this would make a great film because it doesn’t follow Batman or Bruce Wayne, but rather a whole new character for people to rediscover the Batman universe with. It offers a fresh story with a cast of characters you may be familiar with, but shown in an entirely new light.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

I’d bet Jaws

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I’d had the idea for the script for quite awhile before sitting down to write a draft, of which I wrote three in about two months time before it came to how it exists now.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I’d always wanted to give fan fiction a try and contests like this one seemed as good a reason as any.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Finding people to generate good feedback on fan fiction is difficult when no one in your creative circle has done it before so I’d say that was the hardest challenge… That or deciding to gender swap the main character after the first draft.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I enjoy bouldering, movies, and video games when I have the time.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

The festival was great motivation to get the script done and the feedback was indispensable in regards to bettering myself as a writer.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Don’t dwell on the advice of other writers. Do what lets you write and write as much as you can.

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Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

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Fan Fiction Festival Announces its 2016 Screenplay Winners

Fan Fiction Screenplay has announced its 2016 winning screenplays.

All winning screenplays were performed by professional actors and brought to life.

Watch all the winning works at http://www.fanfictionfestival.com

12 Winners for 2016:

1. HOW I MET YOUR MOTHER TV Spec
by Eugene Ramos

2. THERESE (Sequel to 2016 Film CAROL) Feature Script
by Heidi Scott

3. GILLIGAN’S ISLAND OF THE DEATH TV Show
by Jerry Kokich

4. VIGILANTE: THE ORIGINS OF CASEY JONES TV Pilot
(From Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles)
by Justin Prince

5. THE MASK OF LEIA Short Script
(From Star Wars universe)
by Ian Wilson

6. STAR TREK DEEP SPACE NINE TV Spec
by Jennifer Renner

7. SPACE 2099 TV Pilot
(From TV show Space 1999)
by Kevin D. Story

8. STAR WARS Episode 1 Feature Script
(From Star Wars universe)
by Bryan O’Flaherty

9. THE TWILIGHT ZONE TV Spec
by Jaime Medina

10. MAGNUM P.I. TV Spec
by Lew Ritter

11. THE TIME CUCKOO Short Script
(From Doctor Who universe)
by David Gilbank & Paul Renhard

12. US NAVY CINE KODAK Short Script
(From WWII era stories)
by Stephen M. Hunt

November 2016 Fan Fiction Screenplay Winner

Fan Fiction Pilot of GILLIGAN’S ISLAND OF THE DEAD by Jerry Kokich

Watch the Winning Fan Fiction Screenplay for November 2016.

CAST LIST:
NARRATOR – Mallory Palmer
SKIPPER – Peter Nelson
GILLIGAN – Hugh Ritchie
GINGER – Kheon Clarke
MR. HOWELL – Julian Ford
MARY ANN – Angelica Alejandro
LOVEY – Kelci Stephenson

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Fantasy, Horror

A reinvention of the popular series with the same castaways (reinvented) who end up having to fight off Zombies during the night on the far away island.

Get to know the winning writer:

What is your fan fiction screenplay about?

“Gilligan’s Island of The Dead” is a reboot of the classic TV comedy, with everything turned on its head… and zombies!

Why does this modern day twist of the iconic TV show work?

With updated characters, including Gilligan and The Skipper as a gay couple, and the Howells as the Madoffs hiding from the Feds, the series also capitalizes on the current zombie craze.

How would you describe this TV show in 2 words?

Zombie Survival

What TV show have you seen the most times in your life?

The Avengers from the 1960’s!

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

It took about three months to write.

How many stories have you written?

Well over fifty.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Funny story, that. NBC had decided to do a reboot of the TV comedy, The Munsters. They spent millions on the pilot, including building the full size Munsters house. Halfway through the filming of the pilot, they realized it was going to be such a total disaster, they pulled the plug on the series before they had even finished shooting. I was joking with some friends about it on Facebook, and said. “We should do a reboot of Gilligan’s Island with zombies!” I stopped dead. I thought, hey, that’s not a bad idea. I actually detest when old shows are redone and changed, and I’m not a zombie fan, but I decided to put everything I don’t like into this. Of course, it wins a contest!

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

. I really didn’t face any obstacles writing it. I knew the old series very well. I read some books on the making of the series, including one by series creator, Sherwood Schwartz, and watched a documentary produced by Dawn Wells, who played Mary Ann. I did try to market the script, but the Schwartz estate and CBS have the rights, so that was a dead end.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I was a professional ballet dancer with The Joffrey Ballet for eight years, and I now teach in LA. I’m very passionate about my students and their development as dancers.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I submitted a first scene to you guys that won, and the feedback was wonderful, so I decided to enter this full script. I recommend your contests to all my writer friends. The feedback on this project was fantastic. Of course, I loved the praise. The suggestions and criticisms were extremely precise and helpful. What I really appreciated was that you got what I was trying to do. I wanted to take the original series in a completely different direction, but one that made sense in relation to the original characters.

Any advice for other writers?

A much smarter man than I said, 95% of writing is re-writing, so start writing. Don’t sit around thinking about writing, just write. Then write some more. Then enter a Wildsound contest! Also, never assume a woman is pregnant.

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Editor: John Johnson


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Fan Fiction Screenplay – The Mask of Leia by Ian Wilson

Watch the August 2016 Fan Fiction Screenplay Winner.

THE MASK OF LEIA
by Ian Wilson

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Action, Adventure, Sci-Fi

Following the Battle of Endor and the defeat of the Empire, Leia secretly struggles with her own ongoing internal battle with the Force.

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Becky Shrimpton
LEIA – Laura Darby
EMPEROR – Stephen Flett
HAN SOLO – David Straus
ACKBAR – Rais Muoi

Get to know the winner writer: 

1. What is your fan fiction screenplay about?

The Mask of Leia is a thought-provoking drama that explores the hidden psyche of Princess Leia. It aims to prompt the viewer into thinking about the trauma that Leia has undergone through the Star Wars story and what her internal struggles from dealing with all that suffering might be.

By all rights, Leia should be a total basket-case or at least have severe PTSD but she has managed to mask these personal struggles from everyone around her, including Han Solo. The script also explores the potential of her being Force-sensitive and keeping this hidden, perhaps for political reasons.

How does this screenplay fix into the context of the Star Wars universe?

The story takes place just after the Battle of Endor (Star Wars: Episode VI -The Return of the Jedi) and the defeat of the Empire.

Leia and Admiral Ackbar lead the Rebel forces to the planet Coruscant to secure the New Republic. It is during this journey that we see Leia secretly struggle with her trauma and her ongoing internal battle with the Force.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Hidden backstory.

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

I’m a Dr. Who fan. I have been since I was about five years old. I
love watching the current Doctor, Peter Capaldi, because I went to school with him and we were in the same theatre company together as teens in Glasgow, Scotland. He used to play Dr. Who in the school playground and he was a natural at it then. I was not surprised that he got the role as Doctor Who.

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

The story was sketched out over a couple of days between film
director, David Connellan, and myself. It then took me about three weeks to achieve the final draft.

6. How many stories have you written?

In terms of screenplays, I have written five stories – two features and three shorts. I am currently, writing my third feature, which is a thriller/horror.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I have always been a Star Wars fan from the very first time I saw that iconic Star Wars roll-up. So, when my friend and director, David Connellan, asked me to write a screenplay for a Star Wars short I jumped at the chance. Writing the roll-up to this story was fun.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The goal was to come up with a five-minute screenplay – about five pages. Trying to capture the whole of Leia’s trauma into just five minutes was very difficult. My initial draft was close to twelve pages and the final draft was around eight pages. Cutting out some great scenes and dialogue was tortuous. Sadly, cutting it down further for a five-minute film meant a lot of sacrifices in the overall story, including the iconic roll-up.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Travel. In my view, travel has been my greatest teacher. It has
allowed me to experience and understand people and cultures across so many countries. Travel has helped me realize that while we are all members of the same small planet and there are also more ways to live than just the one we have been born into.

Travel is experiential and visual and for me that helps me in my
screenwriting, which is very much about creating a visual experience.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

The Fan Fiction Festival is a well renowned festival and platform for fan fiction and fan films. Entering the Festival was a “must-do” for me. In the Fan Fiction Festival, I love how engaged fans can be in developing their own derivatives of the original stories. It’s a form of organic creation that deserves more credit.

The feedback I received from the festival was very useful in tightening the story. I certainly appreciated this. The only advice I didn’t feel comfortable with was to develop more character for Han Solo. I felt that would have detracted from Leia’s story.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

I like to start with “what if” questions to get a story going. The concept of The Mask of Leia is a good example. What if Leia has PTSD and is being internally pulled by the dark and light side of the Force? Think about that question and you have all sorts of ideas for a story.

Write with passion and don’t be afraid to go with your gut when writing a story. If you let others get involved and question your story concept early in the process it will most likely upset your creativity and your story will turn out half-assed. Of course, listen to feedback once you’ve completed that first and subsequent drafts as feedback will help refine and improve the story.

Finally, I’d say that make sure that you develop engaging characters.

Such characters are distinct, likeable (or loathsome) and have a strong motivation. Ultimately, these characters do not ride along with the flow of the story, rather they create the direction of the story.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson