Winning FAN FICTION Screenplay of D FOR DEXTER, by Jessi Thind

Genre: Crime, Mystery, Thriller, Drama

A new Dexter spin-off series: Dexter’s now in Canada running
a private forensics agency looking for missing persons; their
captors his new target. When an annoying teenager keeps
pestering him for a job, Dexter gets distracted and misses
his chance on a kill, but when his biggest fan intercepts and
does the kill for him.

CAST LIST:

Narrator: Sean Ballantyne
Dexter: Christopher Huron
Gabe: Brandon Nicoletti
Roop: Rais Moui
Arty: Neil Bennett
Yuri: Daniella Zappala
Mae Ling: Connie Wang

 Get to know the winning writer:

What is your TV spec screenplay about?

D for Dexter, originally titled ‘D’, is a spin-off on the original Dexter series, which has Dexter living in Vancouver, Canada, ten years after the events of the season finale. Dexter’s now running a private detective/forensics agency looking for missing persons while hunting ‘monsters’ to satiate his Dark Passenger. In the pilot, an annoying teenager keeps pestering him for a job, constantly distracting Dexter from his target. When he suspects the teenager of knowing his secret, of knowing his past life in Miami, he zeros in on the teenager… but is shocked to discover the teenager is his son Harrison—a chip off the old block.

How does this spin-off fit into the context of the Dexter character and series?

As mentioned it’s about ten years after the events of the season finale. It has Dexter hiding in Canada under an alias doing what he does best. Vancouver’s cold, and rainy, unlike Miami, but it’s still got the water which is a Dexter motif, and Dexter’s back in the mix with a new cast of RCMP officers and forensics investigators. What’s more, I brought back Deb, who is now a figment of Dexter’s imagination. Talking or debating with Deb is Dexter’s way of working through his guilt for what happened to her as well as reconciling his actions toward Harrison. Dexter thinks about Deb so much that he even begins to curse like her now and then in his inner monologue. It’s a subtle tweak to his voice, but it clearly illustrates Dexter had a human side beyond his Dark Passenger. It shows Dexter was an empathetic human being before a traumatic experience gave psychic birth to his Dark Passenger. Throughout the seasons Dexter constantly struggles with his Dark Passenger using Harry’s code to help him. The thing Dexter needed to do was overcome his Dark Passenger or in the very least create his own code. That never really materialized in the series. In fact, it seemed like the opposite happened in the season finale which was confusing in a series that seemed to be about Dexter’s conscious or unconscious need to rebel against his father’s teachings and seize control of his Dark Passenger to reconnect with his humanity. The ending of the Dexter series was a little bit like watching Pinocchio with the alternate ending where Pinocchio never becomes real and dies. In this spin-off, we are dealing with a new Dexter. Dexter has now officially developed his own code and is in control of his Dark Passenger. The only thing missing in his life now is an authentic human relationship. His life drastically changes when teenage Harrison seeks Dexter out and Dexter discovers Harrison is carrying his own Dark Passenger as a result of the trauma he experienced as a child. The spin-off respects what fans loved about the original format yet it has its own approach and tone as we follow an evolved Dexter in the role of an absentee father who is given a second chance. In this series, Dexter ultimately becomes ‘Harry’ which raises the question: Will Dexter be any different than his father? Will he define his son as a monster through a code that robs him of his humanity and individuality and turns him into an instrument of vigilante justice? Or will he do something else altogether? All good questions.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Character Focused. The spin-off is much less about the gore and spectacle and much more about how Dexter reconnects with his human side through his son.

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

There are countless shows but if I had to pick one I’d say: Six Feet Under.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Three months off and on during the twilight hours when my kids are asleep.

How many stories have you written?

Several. I actually started writing in high school. Way back in the nineties I wrote my first novella, Lions of the Sea, based on the story of the Komagata Maru. I adapted it for the big screen in 2005 and now it’s actually winning awards in the festival circuit including Best Feature. That’s always a good feeling. Truth is, I love storytelling, and I love storytelling in multiple mediums such as the novel, film, and games. Each medium brings to the story unique strengths, advantages, and opportunities. To my mind, the most challenging and rewarding is the interactive medium of video games. I have been a designer and ‘Show-runner’ for some of the best games ever produced including Splinter Cell, Tomb Raider, Prince of Persia and Batman. There is nothing like designing interactive narrative systems and leading a team of writers on a game project. One game project could take up to five years to complete with over thirty thousand script pages depending on how systemic the game is. The almost endless possibilities of story and story permutations within a game are what make this medium so attractive and challenging. It’s just too bad game writers like comic book writers of the sixties and seventies still have to prove their medium is a valid one.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

It’s a tie between Violetta Parra’s ‘Gracias a La Vida’ and Louis Armstrong’s ‘What a Wonderful World’.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Choosing the vehicle character. I had a lot of friends suggesting I do the spin-off from Harrison’s point-of-view to create a greater separation from the original series. I didn’t think that was necessary. True, spin-offs generally deal with other characters and new situations. But this has both, just not blatantly. This is an evolved Dexter whose humanity seems to have taken control of his Dark Passenger. He’s Harry to Harrison and that is a new situation unlike anything we’ve seen before. How does Dexter take the lessons he learned with his Dark Passenger and pass it on to Harrison? My friends all had their own take on a Dexter spin-off series. Some didn’t think one was necessary and liked the way the original series ended. I personally felt a little cheated and disappointed. Audiences deserved epic, memorable and meaningful after that huge investment of time in Dexter. I don’t feel that happened. A show’s climax is usually the ultimate expression of its main theme. I’m not sure that by Season 8 all writers were aligned on Dexter’s main theme. For me, the main theme was always the struggle between Dexter’s humanity and his Dark Passenger and that theme seemed flawlessly respected up to Season 4. After that the show seemed to be pulling the thematic chariot in multiple directions. Truth is, I’ve got ‘D for Dexter’ planned as a Daedalus and Icarus tragedy. Harrison will get way over his head with a cult of high society killers. The climatic finale will have killers, plural, closing in on father and son with a massive manhunt led by corrupt cops. The climax will be a moment that will unequivocally express Dexter’s humanity and therefore his triumph over his Dark Passenger and it will also express the new theme of ‘D for Dexter’. Namely: a parent’s love defies all even death. Killers. Corrupt Cops. Sacrifice. That’s the way to close the book on a character like Dexter.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Films, games, teaching Tae Kwon Do and raising my children.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

A friend sent me a link to the festival because he knew I had written several spec scripts in the past. I tapped into the link and enjoyed the productions and thought I’d try my luck with my Dexter spin-off. The feedback like all feedback is invaluable. Even if you just get one good suggestion that improves the script it is worth the investment. A few minor adjustments are often the difference between good and great. I often submit scripts to several editors or readers for feedback in order to take my scripts to the next level of polish.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Write what you are passionate about. If you’re not sure what that is, then take your favorite TV series or game and write a spec script within the series. You may not be able to sell it but it shows skills in storytelling and displays knowledge of the characters, format, and tone.

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Kierston Drier
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Mary Cox

Winning June 2017 FAN FICTION Screenplay – DOCTOR WHO “The Kingdom of the Mara” by Paul Hewitt

Genre: Fantasy, Adventure

The Doctor accidentally picks up Shona and the two investigate a red comet that lands on Earth. The Doctor discovers the Mara are back, and must use their technology against them to defeat them once more.

CAST LIST:

Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
The Doctor: Brian Carleton
Shona: Konstantina Mantelos
Solomon: Anthony Botelho
Vladislav: Jack Comerford
Mila: Andrea Meister
Enok: Jordy Kieto

Get to know the writer:

What is your TV spec screenplay about DOCTOR WHO about?

The Doctor and Shona (last seen in the episode “Last Christmas”), find themselves in Bohemia during the Dark Ages. A tyrant, Lord Ivan, hoards a peculiar red crystal with telepathic powers called the Crimson. Wearing jewels made of Crimson, Lord Ivan and his followers collectively conjure a serpentine gestalt being from the darkest recesses of their minds: The Mara.

Possessed by The Mara, Lord Ivan quickly conquers all before him. He besieges the largest castle (and only cathedral) in the rival kingdom of Vladislav. The Doctor knows that walls, warriors and weapons are no match for the insidious, seductive spell of The Mara.

The Doctor and Shona rouse King Vladislav and his people to fight The Mara through very unconventional means – particularly for The Doctor. The world’s future truly rests on a hope and a prayer.

Why does this screenplay fit into the context of the show?

It’s a traditional good versus evil story with the odd bits of comedy and horror that you’d expect from Dr. Who. I wrote it for the 12th Doctor, Peter Capaldi – who I think is fabulous – a throwback to the 70’s Doctors, Jon Pertwee and Tom Baker.

This story is very much in the mold of classic Doctor Who. You have a historic setting that is disrupted by the presence of a perfidious alien – oh, and then there’s The Mara and a mysterious red crystal. Seriously though, The Mara was one of my favourite Who monsters from the 80’s and I am surprised it has not reappeared on TV (yet). The companion Tegan’s experience with the “evil dream snake” is what made her my favourite during the Peter Davison years.

We all know The Doctor’s companion is a surrogate for the audience and a great companion makes for a great Who story. I chose a character from a recent Christmas special – Shona McCullough (played wonderfully by actor Faye Marsay)– because I immediately saw in her the potential for a long term TARDIS traveller.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Faith Wins

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

Doctor Who
(also Game of Thrones, Mad Men…)

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Six months (Off and On). So maybe 6 weeks’ worth of an actual research and writing (and rewriting).

How many stories have you written?

Two Features (Housesitting, Guttersnipe)
One Documentary (All About Me)
One Short (co-wrote) (Saved From The Grave)

Next up is my own TV series and this TV spec script was an excellent exercise in writing for this genre.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

In My Life (The Beatles)

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Time was my biggest obstacle… finding the time.

The second challenge was how to portray The Mara. It is obviously not my own creation, so I wanted to do justice to the original Mara stories with my version.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Acting, films, politics, history, rugby and beer (not necessarily in that order)

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I had my first feature screenplay analyzed not once, but twice. I was impressed by the depth and value of the criticism. So I did not hesitate to submit my Doctor Who script for analysis and I am pleasantly surprised in the end to have it recognized here. Thank you.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

It’s an old cliché but true: Write what you know. That’s why I picked Doctor Who for my first TV screenplay.

Be prepared to take a lot of criticism along the way. Your story (and your skills) will benefit from it.

Procrastination is thine worst enemy.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Winning FAN FICTION TV PILOT – THE GHOST AND MRS MUIR, by Richard Mueller

Winning Screenplay – THE GHOST AND MRS. MUIR
Written by Richard Mueller

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Elizabeth Morriss
LUCY – Olivia Jon
CONNOR/MARTY – Daniel Chung
DELLA – Tea Nguyen
GREGG – David Occhipinti
NASH – John Fray
SUNSHINE – Georgia Grant
TARA – Cora Matheson

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Horror, Sci-Fi, Romance

A reboot of the 1960s TV show (and 1945 movie) based on the R.A. Dick novel. A young widow and her two teenage children discover that the seaside house they have moved into is haunted. .

 Get to know the writer:

What is your TV Pilot screenplay about?

A single mom and her kids struggle with a failing career, adjusting to small town life and romantic entanglements with a sea captain who’s been dead for a hundred years.

Why should this screenplay be made into a TV show?

Because it’s an entrancing world, filled with lovable, beguiling people.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Spooky Romance

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

Gilmore Girls and Burn Notice

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

About five months from start to submission in Fan Fiction Festival.

How many stories have you written?

Four competed scripts, one half of a novel and 7.4 bizillion ideas.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

OMG. Just one? Okay then: Ruth Brown – Cabbage Head

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Getting past my own ideas of what it was “OK” to write and allowing myself to wantonly follow my inspiration. I’m glad I did it too, because now I am writing more, better and with increased enjoyment.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

My passion is for storytelling. I’m a professional artist and designer with experience in a wide variety of media and I’ve found that regardless of whether I am creating an ad campaign, an interior design, a virtual world or writing a narrative, it is story that is the structure everything else hangs on. And that is something I just can’t get enough of.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I have no writing group and needed an outside eye. I got exactly what I’d hoped for in the feedback, it was perfectly professional, spot on and taught me things that influenced my subsequent project and made me better as a writer.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Follow your inspiration fearlessly and remember there is always more than one reward to creative expression.

*****

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne


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Winning FAN FICTION SPEC of EVERYBODY LOVES RAYMOND, by Marc Mulcahy

Winning Screenplay – EVERYBODY LOVES RAYMOND
Written by Marc Mulcahy

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
MARIE – Frances Townend
RAY – Peter Mark Raphael
DEBRA – Kayla Farris
JEFFREY – Jonah Akler-Silliman
ROBERT – Christopher Huron
AMY – Vanessa Quagliara
FRANK – Charles Gordon

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Family

It’s Marie vs Debra in a cat & mouse game for control of who’s cleaning the house.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay based on the TV SERIES “Everybody Loves Raymond” about?

It’s about seeing what we all figured would happen eventually; that Marie’s constant meddling and being a nuisance in general, would lead to Debra’s insanity.

How does this episode fit into the context of the series?

I actually thought this plot line was a no-brainer for Debra. I would have done this myself given the same situation.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Sweet revenge

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

Seinfeld

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Initially, it took a few days but I’ve tweaked it several times over the past several years.

How many stories have you written?

Three sit coms and one film.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

That’s a tough one. Sometimes I’ll be in a certain mood and one song fits it perfectly so I just keep playing it for hours. Once, during a late, dark night on a long and empty stretch of I99 in California, I listened to Chris Isack’s, Wicked Game for 6 hours.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Still not happy with a couple lines.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Animals, justice, cooking and dining out, creating fun and innovative entertainment, growth, experiencing unforgettable moments (CORRR-ny)

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I wanted to get some feedback on it and I thought people would enjoy it. Great feedback, thanks.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

In the words of Rodney Dangerfield as Thorton Melon, “Don’t go. It’s rough out there. Move back in with your parents. Let them worry about it.”

But if you insist, get your work out there, everywhere. Listen to criticism and learn what you can from it but don’t let it get to you. Remember, your writing is YOUR view on the subject so don’t compromise that. Go back to your earliest stuff and make it better. If you can’t do that, you either have the rare early masterpiece, or maybe you should consider another dream job. I’m sure every writer has heard to write what you know and what you care about. When you do, your writing becomes interesting, and for me, this is the the most important thing about a script. You can follow all the formulas you want but if it isn’t interesting then what’s the point. Conversely, if you have a very interesting story, you can break many, if not most formula rules–as long as you keep it interesting. Oh, and a very good agent wouldn’t hurt, either. The reality is you can be the best unknown writer since Shakespeare, but to be successful at this gig you will also need some luck and there’s a decent chance that some of your success will come from the old “who you know” variety. The fact that every year sharp, really well written shows get dropped while 2 Broke Girls remains on the air (I’m still convinced there’s serious network blackmail going on there) proves this point.

Lastly, A famous script doctor–who’s services I wasted $6,000 on–said that most writers better be prepared to stick it out for 10 years before they can make a living from writing. This Debby Downer also told the auditorium of almost 900 wanna-be writers that only a handful present would probably be successful and that many would lose friends and family because of their failures. In retrospect, I guess I should have waited until AFTER the 3 day seminar to quit my day job. The good news is that with webtv and all the new platforms, there are more opportunities than ever for writers. Just keep looking for these different avenues to showcase your work.


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Producer/Director: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

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Casting: Sean Ballantyne

Classic TV SPEC of HOW I MET YOUR MOTHER by Eugene Ramos

HOW I MET YOUR MOTHER Fan Fiction TV Series
Written by Eugene Ramos

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Michelle Alexander
DIRK – Ucal Shillingford
TED – Noah Casey
LILY – Angela Cavallin
ROBIN – Dana Thody
MARSHALL – Brian Carleton
BETT – Chris Reid Geisler

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Romance

When a college crush visits New York, Ted is determined to chip away at her until she dumps her boyfriend, a play the gang refers to as “Shawshanking”

Get to know the winning writer:

1. What is your TV screenplay based on the TV show “How I Met Your Mother” about?

In my HIMYM script, an old college crush comes to visit New York, and Ted is determined to chip away at her until she dumps her boyfriend. In the Bro Code, this is referred to as “Shawshanking.”

2. How does this episode fit into the context of the series?

I wrote this episode in the midst of season eight, the second to last season. Barney and Robin are together. Marshall and Lily just had their baby. And Ted is very close to meeting the mother of his children.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Shawshanked Redemption

4. What TV show do you watch over and over again?

Recently, I’ve been re-watching episodes of “Star Trek: TNG” and “The X-Files.” In terms of sitcoms, it’s easy to come home after work and relax to an episode of “Seinfeld,” “Friends,” “Big Bang Theory,” or “How I Met Your Mother.”

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

From conception to submitting it to the TV fellowships, I’d say about six months.

6. How many stories have you written?

Honestly I don’t know. I’ve been writing short stories since before high school so that’s a good 25 years. In terms of scripts, I have four features, eight TV scripts – both pilots and specs, and several short film scripts.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

A couple of things. A roommate and I were watching the “Shawshank Redemption,” and our Australian roommate walked in and asked us if we knew what “Shawshanking” was. We didn’t know. So he told us that in Australia, Shawshanking is slang for when a guy, for example, chips away at a woman’s relationship with her boyfriend until they break up and he’s there to be the shoulder to cry on and hopefully become her next boyfriend. I thought this had to be worked into a script, and a HIMYM script just made perfect sense.

In the meantime, I was still getting over a crush with a librarian I used to work with. I had written a romantic comedy about Isaac Newton in which he falls for a Prussian royal (who is also the librarian at the Berlin Royal Academy) and, as a result, makes his greatest scientific discoveries. I guess I still wasn’t over the librarian, so I used the HIMYM script to explore the regret over missed opportunities. Some of the dialogue between Ted and Ally, the librarian, are based on conversations I had with the real-life librarian.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The eternal struggle is finding time to write between the hours of your day job. I called in sick a few times to meet deadlines.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I love watching movies and reading comic books and going to concerts. I also love Sour Patch Watermelon.

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I love the idea of a fan-fiction festival. I’ve written “Star Trek” fanfic, and I’ve won a few fan-fiction writing contests for shows like “Star Trek,” “Battlestar Galactica,” and “Painkiller Jane.” At the end of the day, TV spec scripts are essentially fan fiction. You get to play with characters outside the canon. You get to do things that shows would likely never do. I’ve always thought it was a shame that spec scripts have an expiration date. The Fan Fiction Screenplay Festival allows participants to breathe new life into their so-called expired scripts. I

I thought my initial feedback was fantastic. It’s great to get feedback from someone who doesn’t know you personally. It’s especially helpful when trying to figure out if jokes land and how to fix them when they don’t.

11. Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

I think it’s profoundly helpful to surround yourself with talented writers and form tight bonds with them. Last year I was part of the CAPE New Writers Fellowship and the Clarion Science Fiction and Fantasy Writers Workshop. I’ve grown very close with the writers I met in both groups. Not only do they give great notes, but also any success by one person contributes to the success of the group as a whole. Some of these friends are now staffed on shows or are publishing novels with traditional publishers (and garnering awards at the same time). They raise the bar and open doors for the rest of us.

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Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson


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November 2016 Fan Fiction Screenplay Winner

Fan Fiction Pilot of GILLIGAN’S ISLAND OF THE DEAD by Jerry Kokich

Watch the Winning Fan Fiction Screenplay for November 2016.

CAST LIST:
NARRATOR – Mallory Palmer
SKIPPER – Peter Nelson
GILLIGAN – Hugh Ritchie
GINGER – Kheon Clarke
MR. HOWELL – Julian Ford
MARY ANN – Angelica Alejandro
LOVEY – Kelci Stephenson

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Fantasy, Horror

A reinvention of the popular series with the same castaways (reinvented) who end up having to fight off Zombies during the night on the far away island.

Get to know the winning writer:

What is your fan fiction screenplay about?

“Gilligan’s Island of The Dead” is a reboot of the classic TV comedy, with everything turned on its head… and zombies!

Why does this modern day twist of the iconic TV show work?

With updated characters, including Gilligan and The Skipper as a gay couple, and the Howells as the Madoffs hiding from the Feds, the series also capitalizes on the current zombie craze.

How would you describe this TV show in 2 words?

Zombie Survival

What TV show have you seen the most times in your life?

The Avengers from the 1960’s!

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

It took about three months to write.

How many stories have you written?

Well over fifty.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Funny story, that. NBC had decided to do a reboot of the TV comedy, The Munsters. They spent millions on the pilot, including building the full size Munsters house. Halfway through the filming of the pilot, they realized it was going to be such a total disaster, they pulled the plug on the series before they had even finished shooting. I was joking with some friends about it on Facebook, and said. “We should do a reboot of Gilligan’s Island with zombies!” I stopped dead. I thought, hey, that’s not a bad idea. I actually detest when old shows are redone and changed, and I’m not a zombie fan, but I decided to put everything I don’t like into this. Of course, it wins a contest!

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

. I really didn’t face any obstacles writing it. I knew the old series very well. I read some books on the making of the series, including one by series creator, Sherwood Schwartz, and watched a documentary produced by Dawn Wells, who played Mary Ann. I did try to market the script, but the Schwartz estate and CBS have the rights, so that was a dead end.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I was a professional ballet dancer with The Joffrey Ballet for eight years, and I now teach in LA. I’m very passionate about my students and their development as dancers.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I submitted a first scene to you guys that won, and the feedback was wonderful, so I decided to enter this full script. I recommend your contests to all my writer friends. The feedback on this project was fantastic. Of course, I loved the praise. The suggestions and criticisms were extremely precise and helpful. What I really appreciated was that you got what I was trying to do. I wanted to take the original series in a completely different direction, but one that made sense in relation to the original characters.

Any advice for other writers?

A much smarter man than I said, 95% of writing is re-writing, so start writing. Don’t sit around thinking about writing, just write. Then write some more. Then enter a Wildsound contest! Also, never assume a woman is pregnant.

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Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson


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Fan Fiction Screenplay: Star Trek Deep Space Nine: Power Loss by Jennifer Renner

Watch the July 2016 Winning Fan Fiction Screenplay.

Star Trek Deep Space Nine: Power Loss by Jennifer Renner

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Sci-Fi, Adventure, Action, Fantasy

Synopsis: Episode 32.5 of the TV series Star Trek: Deep Space Nine. The station welcomes visitors from a planet in the Gamma Quadrant that allows only women to hold positions of authority.

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Brandon Knox
BENNI – Susan Wilson
SORYA/KIRA – Meghan Allen
DAX/LELA – Courtney Keir
ODO – Julian Ford
BASHIR/QUARK – David Guthrie
SISKO/RISHTA – Sean Ballantyne

Get to know the winning writer Jennifer Renner

1. What is your TV Fan Fiction screenplay about?

Deep Space 9 welcomes visitors from a planet in the Gamma Quadrant that only allows women to hold positions of authority.

2. Why does this episode fit into the context of the show?

The episode uses a futuristic setting and the unique perspectives of the characters to discuss a social issue. One of my favorite things about the whole Star Trek phenomenon was the ability to look at potentially controversial issues under a new and intriguing light.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Existential exploration.

4. What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

Star Trek: TNG

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I worked on this screenplay for about three months.

6. How many stories have you written?

I’ve written many short screenplays and three feature length screenplays.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I love the different personalities in DS9. The topic of gender has been in the spotlight recently and using the voices of DS9 seemed a good way to explore this issue.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

I don’t have much experience writing for TV, so that was fairly new to me. I also wanted to do justice to the Star Trek universe and it is a complex place to navigate. Use the term “warp coil” when you specifically mean “warp nacelle” and you’ve lost all credibility.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

All things film! From theory to shooting and editing, to just a lot of viewing, I enjoy it all.

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I was excited about the prospect of receiving feedback to improve my writing. The feedback I received offered many helpful suggestions, both in terms of my writing in general and as a piece in the DS9 universe. I’m definitely glad I entered this festival.

11. Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Although I don’t feel qualified to give advice, I would say to try writing as many different types of works as you can. From one-act plays to feature screenplays to poetry to just a really well-written email, there are so many ways to express yourself well through writing.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne