Winning June 2017 FAN FICTION Screenplay – DOCTOR WHO “The Kingdom of the Mara” by Paul Hewitt

Genre: Fantasy, Adventure

The Doctor accidentally picks up Shona and the two investigate a red comet that lands on Earth. The Doctor discovers the Mara are back, and must use their technology against them to defeat them once more.

CAST LIST:

Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
The Doctor: Brian Carleton
Shona: Konstantina Mantelos
Solomon: Anthony Botelho
Vladislav: Jack Comerford
Mila: Andrea Meister
Enok: Jordy Kieto

Get to know the writer:

What is your TV spec screenplay about DOCTOR WHO about?

The Doctor and Shona (last seen in the episode “Last Christmas”), find themselves in Bohemia during the Dark Ages. A tyrant, Lord Ivan, hoards a peculiar red crystal with telepathic powers called the Crimson. Wearing jewels made of Crimson, Lord Ivan and his followers collectively conjure a serpentine gestalt being from the darkest recesses of their minds: The Mara.

Possessed by The Mara, Lord Ivan quickly conquers all before him. He besieges the largest castle (and only cathedral) in the rival kingdom of Vladislav. The Doctor knows that walls, warriors and weapons are no match for the insidious, seductive spell of The Mara.

The Doctor and Shona rouse King Vladislav and his people to fight The Mara through very unconventional means – particularly for The Doctor. The world’s future truly rests on a hope and a prayer.

Why does this screenplay fit into the context of the show?

It’s a traditional good versus evil story with the odd bits of comedy and horror that you’d expect from Dr. Who. I wrote it for the 12th Doctor, Peter Capaldi – who I think is fabulous – a throwback to the 70’s Doctors, Jon Pertwee and Tom Baker.

This story is very much in the mold of classic Doctor Who. You have a historic setting that is disrupted by the presence of a perfidious alien – oh, and then there’s The Mara and a mysterious red crystal. Seriously though, The Mara was one of my favourite Who monsters from the 80’s and I am surprised it has not reappeared on TV (yet). The companion Tegan’s experience with the “evil dream snake” is what made her my favourite during the Peter Davison years.

We all know The Doctor’s companion is a surrogate for the audience and a great companion makes for a great Who story. I chose a character from a recent Christmas special – Shona McCullough (played wonderfully by actor Faye Marsay)– because I immediately saw in her the potential for a long term TARDIS traveller.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Faith Wins

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

Doctor Who
(also Game of Thrones, Mad Men…)

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Six months (Off and On). So maybe 6 weeks’ worth of an actual research and writing (and rewriting).

How many stories have you written?

Two Features (Housesitting, Guttersnipe)
One Documentary (All About Me)
One Short (co-wrote) (Saved From The Grave)

Next up is my own TV series and this TV spec script was an excellent exercise in writing for this genre.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

In My Life (The Beatles)

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Time was my biggest obstacle… finding the time.

The second challenge was how to portray The Mara. It is obviously not my own creation, so I wanted to do justice to the original Mara stories with my version.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Acting, films, politics, history, rugby and beer (not necessarily in that order)

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I had my first feature screenplay analyzed not once, but twice. I was impressed by the depth and value of the criticism. So I did not hesitate to submit my Doctor Who script for analysis and I am pleasantly surprised in the end to have it recognized here. Thank you.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

It’s an old cliché but true: Write what you know. That’s why I picked Doctor Who for my first TV screenplay.

Be prepared to take a lot of criticism along the way. Your story (and your skills) will benefit from it.

Procrastination is thine worst enemy.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Winning FAN FICTION TV PILOT – THE GHOST AND MRS MUIR, by Richard Mueller

Winning Screenplay – THE GHOST AND MRS. MUIR
Written by Richard Mueller

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Elizabeth Morriss
LUCY – Olivia Jon
CONNOR/MARTY – Daniel Chung
DELLA – Tea Nguyen
GREGG – David Occhipinti
NASH – John Fray
SUNSHINE – Georgia Grant
TARA – Cora Matheson

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Horror, Sci-Fi, Romance

A reboot of the 1960s TV show (and 1945 movie) based on the R.A. Dick novel. A young widow and her two teenage children discover that the seaside house they have moved into is haunted. .

 Get to know the writer:

What is your TV Pilot screenplay about?

A single mom and her kids struggle with a failing career, adjusting to small town life and romantic entanglements with a sea captain who’s been dead for a hundred years.

Why should this screenplay be made into a TV show?

Because it’s an entrancing world, filled with lovable, beguiling people.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Spooky Romance

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

Gilmore Girls and Burn Notice

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

About five months from start to submission in Fan Fiction Festival.

How many stories have you written?

Four competed scripts, one half of a novel and 7.4 bizillion ideas.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

OMG. Just one? Okay then: Ruth Brown – Cabbage Head

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Getting past my own ideas of what it was “OK” to write and allowing myself to wantonly follow my inspiration. I’m glad I did it too, because now I am writing more, better and with increased enjoyment.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

My passion is for storytelling. I’m a professional artist and designer with experience in a wide variety of media and I’ve found that regardless of whether I am creating an ad campaign, an interior design, a virtual world or writing a narrative, it is story that is the structure everything else hangs on. And that is something I just can’t get enough of.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I have no writing group and needed an outside eye. I got exactly what I’d hoped for in the feedback, it was perfectly professional, spot on and taught me things that influenced my subsequent project and made me better as a writer.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Follow your inspiration fearlessly and remember there is always more than one reward to creative expression.

*****

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne


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Winning FAN FICTION SPEC of EVERYBODY LOVES RAYMOND, by Marc Mulcahy

Winning Screenplay – EVERYBODY LOVES RAYMOND
Written by Marc Mulcahy

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
MARIE – Frances Townend
RAY – Peter Mark Raphael
DEBRA – Kayla Farris
JEFFREY – Jonah Akler-Silliman
ROBERT – Christopher Huron
AMY – Vanessa Quagliara
FRANK – Charles Gordon

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Family

It’s Marie vs Debra in a cat & mouse game for control of who’s cleaning the house.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay based on the TV SERIES “Everybody Loves Raymond” about?

It’s about seeing what we all figured would happen eventually; that Marie’s constant meddling and being a nuisance in general, would lead to Debra’s insanity.

How does this episode fit into the context of the series?

I actually thought this plot line was a no-brainer for Debra. I would have done this myself given the same situation.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Sweet revenge

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

Seinfeld

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Initially, it took a few days but I’ve tweaked it several times over the past several years.

How many stories have you written?

Three sit coms and one film.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

That’s a tough one. Sometimes I’ll be in a certain mood and one song fits it perfectly so I just keep playing it for hours. Once, during a late, dark night on a long and empty stretch of I99 in California, I listened to Chris Isack’s, Wicked Game for 6 hours.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Still not happy with a couple lines.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Animals, justice, cooking and dining out, creating fun and innovative entertainment, growth, experiencing unforgettable moments (CORRR-ny)

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I wanted to get some feedback on it and I thought people would enjoy it. Great feedback, thanks.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

In the words of Rodney Dangerfield as Thorton Melon, “Don’t go. It’s rough out there. Move back in with your parents. Let them worry about it.”

But if you insist, get your work out there, everywhere. Listen to criticism and learn what you can from it but don’t let it get to you. Remember, your writing is YOUR view on the subject so don’t compromise that. Go back to your earliest stuff and make it better. If you can’t do that, you either have the rare early masterpiece, or maybe you should consider another dream job. I’m sure every writer has heard to write what you know and what you care about. When you do, your writing becomes interesting, and for me, this is the the most important thing about a script. You can follow all the formulas you want but if it isn’t interesting then what’s the point. Conversely, if you have a very interesting story, you can break many, if not most formula rules–as long as you keep it interesting. Oh, and a very good agent wouldn’t hurt, either. The reality is you can be the best unknown writer since Shakespeare, but to be successful at this gig you will also need some luck and there’s a decent chance that some of your success will come from the old “who you know” variety. The fact that every year sharp, really well written shows get dropped while 2 Broke Girls remains on the air (I’m still convinced there’s serious network blackmail going on there) proves this point.

Lastly, A famous script doctor–who’s services I wasted $6,000 on–said that most writers better be prepared to stick it out for 10 years before they can make a living from writing. This Debby Downer also told the auditorium of almost 900 wanna-be writers that only a handful present would probably be successful and that many would lose friends and family because of their failures. In retrospect, I guess I should have waited until AFTER the 3 day seminar to quit my day job. The good news is that with webtv and all the new platforms, there are more opportunities than ever for writers. Just keep looking for these different avenues to showcase your work.


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Producer/Director: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

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Casting: Sean Ballantyne

FAN FICTION Screenplay – SPINACH RUN (Popeye), by Neil Chase

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Winning Screenplay – SPINACH RUN
Written by Neil Chase

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Ursina Luther
POPEYE – Philip Krusto
BLUTO – Casey Estey
WIMPY – Geoff Mays
JUAN CORTEX – John Lester Phillips
SEGAR – Sean Ballantyne

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Action, Crime, Thriller

Tasked with capturing a nefarious chemist, Navy SEALs Popeye, Bluto, Sweet-Pea and Wimpy find themselves at the mercy of an infamous drug lord.

Get to know the writer:

What is your Fan Fiction screenplay on the cartoon “POPEYE” about?

Spinach Run is a fresh take on the Popeye universe, where four Navy SEALs (Popeye, Bluto, Sweet-Pea, and Wimpy) are sent to a South American jungle to capture a wanted chemist and recover a sample of his experimental toxin, code-named Spinach. Their mission goes sideways and they’re captured by the chemist’s employer, a notorious drug lord, who decides to use them as guinea pigs for the toxin.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Popeye’s been around for almost 90 years, and through all that time, he’s been portrayed pretty much the same way. This is a completely different way of seeing the characters we all know and love, while staying true to who they are at heart.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Action, thriller.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Probably Star Wars.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

It took me about three days to write it. Once the initial idea came to me and I started writing, it came pretty fast.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve been writing since I was a kid, so it’s hard to say how many short stories there have been. That said, I’ve written a dozen feature screenplays, numerous short screenplays, and I’m awaiting publication of my debut novel.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I always wanted to try my hand at fan fiction, so I thought I’d take a crack at a character that’s not so mainstream, yet one that’s still recognizable.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

None that I can think of. It was a fun experience from start to finish.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

My other passion is acting, which actually helps me to be a better screenwriter, as I’ve learned where to focus in terms of dialogue, action lines, and so on. I try to write the kinds of scripts I would want to read as an actor.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

The Fan Fiction Festival is well known, and seemed like a perfect fit for this script. It was a great way to gauge if I was onto something with my take on a classic character. I’m so glad to have entered, not only for the win, but for the fantastic feedback. It’s good to see the script’s strengths and areas for improvement. This was a fun script to write, and I’m grateful for the useful advice to make it even better. Thank you for the great notes!

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Audience Feedback: QUESTIONS, 6min, USA, Fan Fiction/Action

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  MOVIE POSTERQUESTIONS, 6min, USA, Fan Fiction/Action
Directed by Zack Russell Bartlett

Based on “Question” DC Comics. Two faceless vigilantes search for answers as they take on a dangerous criminal.

Film Type:Short, Student, Web / New Media

Genres:Superhero, Action, Fan Film

Runtime:6 minutes 28 seconds

Completion Date:June 30, 2016

Production Budget:600 USD

Country of Origin:United States

Country of Filming:United States

Film Language:English

Shooting Format:Digital

Aspect Ratio:16:9

Film Color:Color

FILM CREW:

Producer: Natalia Hernandez

Director of Photography: Otto Gaiser

Key Cast: Melissa Roxburgh

Key Cast: Nolan Sullivan

Key Cast: Lynn Twarowski

Production Designer: Andrea Besch

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Audience Feedback: ARKHAM’S JOURNAL, 7min, Canada, Fan Fiction/Mystery

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  MOVIE POSTERARKHAM’S JOURNAL, 7min, Canada, Fan Fiction/Mystery
Directed by Matthew P.H Rea

Based on “Batman” DC Comics. Filmed in and around Toronto, this short proof-of-concept film provides a small insight into the untold stories of Gotham’s darkest hour. With the timeline loosely based around the batman comic, “Knightfall”, Arkham’s Journal is told through the words of Dr. Arkham’s Journal, detailing the lives of all the Arkham Asylum patients.

Film Type:Short

Runtime:7 minutes 1 second

Completion Date:July 4, 2016

Production Budget:20,000 USD

Country of Origin:Canada

Country of Filming:Canada

Film Language:English

Shooting Format:RED Epic-X

Film Color:Color

FILM CREW:

Producer: Thao Nguyen

Writers: Stas Simon, Matthew Read

Key Cast: James Levesque

Key Cast: Aleksandra Kimaeva

Key Cast: Dave Walpole

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Audience Feedback: 2BR02B: TO BE OR NAUGHT TO BE, 18min, Canada, Sci-Fi/Fan Fiction

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  MOVIE POSTER2BR02B: TO BE OR NAUGHT TO BE, 18min, Canada, Sci-Fi/Fan Fiction
Directed by Marco Checa Garcia

Based on the short story “2 B R 0 2 B” by Kurt Vonnegut. Set in a dystopian future where population is strictly controlled, a Father waits for his children to be born. In a deserted hospital waiting room, one man must ask himself exactly what he is willing to do, to give his children a chance at life, any life at all.

Film Type:Short

Genres:sci fi

Runtime:18 minutes

Completion Date:February 1, 2016

Production Budget:0 USD

Country of Origin:Canada

Country of Filming:Canada

Film Language:English

Shooting Format:HD Arri Alexa

Film Color:Color

FILM CREW:

Writer/Producer: Derek Ryan

Sound Desiger: Martin Cantwell

Key Cast: Melissa Roxburgh

Key Cast: Artin John

Key Cast: Jason Diablo

Key Cast: Tyler Johnston

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